Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general.
During
in
working experience, most Change preposition
apply
community
need to work extremely hard for their future. Change to a plural noun
communities
This
crisis will affect to
the Change preposition
apply
time
that they take to do the hobbies that they interested
in the past. There are only a few Add a missing verb
were interested
people
who give their resting time
to spend doing Add an article
the thing
a thing
thing
that they like. Fix the agreement mistake
things
This
essay will explain the reason and the effect on why avocation
times are not been popular as same as in the previous.
To begin
with
the reason that can represent why there is only Add a comma
,with
few
Change the article
a few
people
devote time
to hobbies, thereare
fields of crowd believe that they need to waste a portion of money Correct your spelling
there are
for
complete their pastime. Change preposition
to
Although
there are
Change the verb form
is
alternative
Add an article
an alternative
option
for Fix the agreement mistake
options
workers'
Change noun form
workers
interested
, the cost Replace the word
interest
on
each Change preposition
of
avocation
becomes more and more expensive. For example
, if you interest to
consume your free Change preposition
in
time
on
doing ice skating and playing Change preposition
apply
any
board games, you will be responsible Correct quantifier usage
apply
topay
money Correct your spelling
to pay
on
Change preposition
for
entrance
Correct article usage
the entrance
fee
and shoe Fix the agreement mistake
fees
renting
Replace the word
rent
then
your
collective income that you prepare for Change the pronoun
the
using
in Change the form of the verb
use
the
emergency case is going to Correct article usage
an
decreasing
. Wrong verb form
decrease
Therefore
, the impact on people
who devote time
for
hobbies, Change preposition
to
they
need to manage their Correct pronoun usage
apply
financial
to become Replace the word
finances
Wrong verb form
balanced
balance
.
Correct your spelling
balanced
Furthermore
, there are a number of effect
that cause Change to a plural noun
effects
to
individual Change preposition
apply
worker
Replace the word
working
people
which are the
stress. When they grow up, they will face Correct article usage
apply
with
various job depression that Change preposition
apply
accumulate
and affect Change the verb form
accumulates
to
their mental health. Change preposition
apply
For instance
, in order to work on
the office, there Change preposition
in
are
an area of risk Change the verb form
is
factor
that Fix the agreement mistake
factors
introduce
increasingly their stress Change the verb form
introduces
level
Change the noun form
levels
such
as workload and toxic society. Thus
, they are suggested to find their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
time
to remove work problems by doing a number of Add an article
an avocation
avocation
that Fix the agreement mistake
avocations
they
are enjoyable on the weekend.
In conclusion, Correct pronoun usage
apply
hobby
is Correct article usage
a hobby
the
necessary thing that every crowd must have due to the fact it gives many advantages to their life, while there are only Correct article usage
a
few
Change the article
a few
community
who Change to a plural noun
communities
interested
to use their resting Add a missing verb
are interested
time
for doing their avocation
. This
essay explained the
Correct your spelling
that
time
management can cause people
do
not Unnecessary verb
apply
have
diversion Fix the infinitive
to have
time
in their life and introduced the
mental health problem.Correct article usage
apply
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- Dear + name
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- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.
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