employers some times ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. some people say that this information may be relevent and useful. others disagree. discuss about these views and give your own opinion.

Personal
information
about job applicants,
such
as hobbies, interests and whether they are married or single, is sometimes asked by employers. While some people say that
this
information
is relevant and useful, others, including me, do not. On the one hand, knowing about
personal
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the personal
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information
of employees helps employers understand their workers more.
In other words
, if you know individual
information
about your workers, you will know
about
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what they need and create a suitable
work
environment,
therefore
, keeping them in the
company
.
For example
, in a
company
that has many young employees who like parties and chatting, the
company
can organize parties after long stressful projects.
This
helps staff relax and refill their energy battery to get back to
work
; in
the
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party time, everyone in the
company
have
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time to commute and
more
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understand each other so
that
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which
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makes working together more productive.
On the other hand
, most employers just ask for
employee's
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employees'
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personal
information
because it is a general form and they do not really care about them. In fact, most companies in Vietnam when
employing
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,
it
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always has
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about
employee's
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employees'
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hobbies; I used to
work
in
recruitment
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the recruitment
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department and I do not understand why having
this
entry
,
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because we never use
this
entry during
work
time in the
company
of employees. In my opinion,
this
information
is quite unuseful for both recruit and employee's
work
processing. Almost just large and huge companies are enough abilities to care about worker's
interest
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interests
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and meet that demand. In conclusion,
although
personal
information
has
some
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certain advantages, it seems to me that
this
information
is pretty unuseful and hard to apply.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employers
  • applying for jobs
  • personal information
  • hobbies
  • interests
  • marital status
  • relevance
  • usefulness
  • insights
  • personality
  • compatibility
  • company culture
  • skills
  • passions
  • job positions
  • discrimination concerns
  • qualifications
  • experience
  • hiring decisions
  • structured interviews
  • objective assessments
  • balance
  • professional qualities
  • decisive factor
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