‘Healthcare should always be funded by governments, and it should always be free for people to use.’ To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

Having free

healthcare

should be the

right

that is

provided to every individual. Governments should be obligated to pay for each and every person's health costs no matter the financial status.

Although

I agree with

this

statement some

people

have a different view.

To begin

with, governments should fund

healthcare

because every life is worth the same. We are living in a materialistic world where it is easy to get carried away and only look at someone's financial situation, moreso we determine their worth only by looking at

this

aspect. I believe that

this

point of view is not

right

For example

, a minimum wage worker should not have less

right

to receive treatment

then

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an upper-class individual.

Furthermore

people

in charge of the country are spending their money on useless things rather

then

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focusing their funding on something as useful as

this

, like building new buildings that are not needed when they could spend it on providing

healthcare

On the other hand

, you might think, "Well there are already too many

people

in the world. Why should we save

people

who do not even have enough money to pay for their treatment."

This

indicates

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a materialistic point of view. I think that the better way to keep

this

problem in check is to let

people

who can not be cured pass away, and the ones that can

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able to do that. Other ways are just not morally

right

. To conclude, not funding

healthcare

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each citizen is not morally

right

. Even more, it only contributes to the evolution of the materialistic world that we live in. For these

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reasonings

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every individual should have

healthcare

provided by their government.

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Universal healthcare
Commodified
Public health standards
Economic burden
Mixed healthcare system
Preventive healthcare
Efficiency
Quality of care
Fundamental human right
Government-funded
Private sector involvement
Healthcare services
Education in healthcare

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