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some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born what might the reasons for this? what are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Some humans prefer to stay where they were born while
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 some people do not . In
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 of all , there is a fact that everybody usually likes their home town , because , they depend on their families . It means their family can support them emotionally and economically .
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 , when their parents get older , they try to take care of them and very important point . generally , numerous humans prefer to live where they were born they communicate with their friends and do things that they are familiar with. On the other side , there is a view that
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says living in the city where they were born has some disadvantages , because they may lose job opportunities in another city or abroad even .
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, they will lose make new friends , new communication and do new things ,
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 living in a city where they were born has some disadvantages , I strongly believe that its advantages are more .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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