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Nowadays many people want to buy famous brands of clothes,cars and other items.what athe reasons for this? Do you think it is positive or negative development?

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The given line graph compares the
number
 of
travelers
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, who visited a Caribbean
island
, residing either on
Cruise
ships
 or on the
island
, and the total
number
 of them from 2010 to 2017. Overall, it can be seen that, despite some fluctuation, over the period as a whole the total
number
 of
visitors
 increased sharply.
To begin
, in 2010, the Caribbean
island
 had a total
number
 of 1
million
visitors
. About 750 thousand
travelers
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travellers
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 chose the
island
 to reside, three times as many
travelers
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travellers
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 as
Cruise
ships
. Over the following 3 years, while, the
number
 of people who resided on the
island
 saw a considerable rise and climbed to 1.5
million
, the rate of tourists who chose
Cruise
ships
 fluctuated, reaching 1
million
 in 2013. During the period 2013 to 2017, the proportion of
visitors
 staying on the
island
, despite a minimal fall in 2016, did not change and stood at 1.5
million
.
However
, there was considerable growth in residents of
Cruise
ships
, overtaking
island
 residents between 2015 and 2016 and hitting a high of 2
million
 in 2017. The total
number
 of
visitors
also
 increased to 3.5
million
 at the end.
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