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Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#persons #countries
At the present time, environmental
issues
 have  changed
one
of
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the serious
problems
 not only for
one
 country but
also
 for all countries and human beings. I completely agree
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this
 view and think that environmental
problems
 cannot be only
one
country’s
issues
 and all nations need to solve
these kind
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 of
problems
 altogether.
First
 of all, I believe that having a union among the countries to resolve
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environmental
problems
 may be
much
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 more effective way.
In other words
, only if
one
 nation fight
to
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the
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environmental
problems
 like air pollution, contamination, drought and soil erosion,
this
country’s
 effort may be manky
,
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 because
this kind
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 of
issues
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 only can be solved by
union
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the union
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 of countries.
For example
,
Chinese
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country’s
 government prohibited to smoke, using
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cars and anything which are making
some
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dangerous
effect
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effects
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for
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 our nature. But,
although
this
country’s
 too much
efforts
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 to resolve some
problems
, they are not able to solve all of them.
Therefore
,
people
 and nations should try to stop the environmental troubles
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like as
one
 body.  
Second
 of all,
People
 are not
managed
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 to resolve the
problems
 which are badly
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to
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our ecosystem.
That is
 to say, only if some
people
 fight to reduce the environmental
problems
however
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 others not, after  these
issues
 may keep
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 increases
itself
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pollution or other sorts of dangerous impact
for
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 our environment.
For instance
, some
people
 may
to
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be environmentally friendly and
another types
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 of
people
 can be unfriendly and they may throw away their own garbage
to
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 the land and
this
 can create some risky environmental
issues
.
Thus
, we mankind should hold the balance of environmental
problems
. To conclude, I strongly believe that fighting
to
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the environmental
problems
 under
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one
 union can be
best
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 solution for our mankind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collective action
  • climate change
  • rising sea levels
  • extreme weather events
  • biodiversity loss
  • ecosystems
  • Convention on Biological Diversity
  • significant improvements
  • sovereignty
  • environmental policies
  • international collaboration
  • environmental degradation
  • shared responsibility
  • technological advances
  • innovative solutions
  • international cooperation
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