Many people believe that educational standards have decliend in recent times, particularly int he areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.
In several countries, some
people
think it is needed to spend big
amount of Add an article
a big
money
on constructing new
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a new
railway
for bullet trains between cities and some Fix the agreement mistake
railways
people
think it is better to spent
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spend
money
on enhance
existing public Change the verb form
enhancing
transport
. While thinking of the benefits for the citizen, I believed that it better
to improve existing public Add a missing verb
is better
transport
to provide commute workers.
On the one hand, public transport
is the hiding backbone of the
economic growth in one area. A bunch of benefits follow with it. With good public Correct article usage
apply
transport
, it can reduced
the number of Change the verb form
reduce
people
using their private car that leads to lesser traffic jam
and lower air pollution. Fix the agreement mistake
jams
In addition
, it can make people
more productive since they did not spend a lot of their time on the way home or on the way to work. Also
, with lower
number of Add an article
a lower
the lower
people
use
their private car, the gas price does not affect anymore to the price of primary needs (inflation) since Wrong verb form
using
gas
station is no longer their basic needs. At the end of the day, better public Add an article
the gas
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transport
tansport
plays a big role in Correct your spelling
transport
economy
.
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the economy
On the other hand
, spend
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spending
large
amount of Change the article
a large
money
to build a new railway line is such
a waste. There are only few
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a few
commuter
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commuters
go
to Correct pronoun usage
who go
the
other cities for work, Correct article usage
apply
often times
Correct your spelling
oftentimes
people
who are going to other cities is for holiday and it is only will be useful in high
season. Correct article usage
the high
Also
, now we already have airplance
that provides much faster and Correct your spelling
aeroplanes
aeroplane
reliable
transportation.
In conclusion, in my Correct quantifier usage
more reliable
opinion
it is always better to improve existing public Add a comma
,opinion
transport
to promote the economy of one area rather than spend large
amount of Change the article
a large
money
to build new railways line since we already have better Correct your spelling
transportation
transportion
like Correct your spelling
transportation
airplane
nowadays.Fix the agreement mistake
airplanes
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