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Children are facing more pressure nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?.

#children #pressure #perspectives #pressures #measures
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The graph illustrates the recycling rates of paper and cardboard, glass containers,
aluminum
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 cans and plastic between 1982 and 2010 for one country. Overall, Recycling of paper and cardboard
were
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 the highest
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, followed by glass containers. The recycling
rate
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 of
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 experienced
sharp
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increase
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, whereas the plastic recycling
rate
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 was the lowest. It
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 slightly over the period. In 1982, about 65% of paper and cardboard were recycled,
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 it
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fluctuation until reached
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 peak in 1994,
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 it experienced a gradual decrease until
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 70% level. In 1982, about 50% of glass containers were recycled, after that the recycling
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decreased to 40%,
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steady
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 to 60%.
The
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aluminum
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 cans recycling
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started in 1986
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 5%
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, the figure experienced a sharp
increase
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 to 45% over the period.
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, the recycling of plastic was
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 in 1994
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 3%,
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 constantly with small change over the period.
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