Nowadays there is an increase in social problems involving young people because more parents spent time at work than with their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that there is an increasing tendency for the young population to get into social issues,
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there are more criminals involved in teenagers or suicides and so on. And there is more than one reason for
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situation, I do not agree that parents should take all the responsibility for it. But it will apparently get better if they can take more actions to deal with
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problem. There are more kinds of problems that emerged with teenagers as we can see, and the reasons behind them are really complicated and various.
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, nowadays young people have a lot of ways to explore and get in touch with society, and social media is really a complicated product. The young population may not know how to use it and are
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influenced by it deeply.
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, toxic perspectives or people with negative attitudes could influence them easily.
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, when the community at a young age, has huge curiosity and ambition about the world, the dearth of moral and legal awareness can lead them into dangerous situations.
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, parents are too busy or too boss and are excluded by their children. When individuals are in their adolescence, it is really hard to let them
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comply with the public who are older than them,
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time is always filled with conflicts.
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, peers are not the only or the main reason why the young population get in trouble, but
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their many things they could do to cope with the issue. On the one hand, children of
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age need guidance and orientation. They have both the energy and the motivation to explore the world, but at the same time they are
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confused and helpless, their moods and ideas change several times a day. During
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period they really need some gentle guidance from outside, especially from parents, the authority in their early life.
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very important to provide them with a way to establish the right values.
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, more discussions about daily news or reading time, to let young generations learn about critical thinking, and think comprehensively. In conclusion, I disagree with the opinion that mothers and fathers are the main reason for the increasing social problems involving young generations.
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