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Some people have argued that there will be no need for art galleries in the future because people can view works of art freely on the internet. Compare and contrast the benefits of viewing art in real life with viewing it on the internet. In your opinion, which is better? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The table shows the independent movies released by various types in the UK in 2012.

 Overall, the highest figure for releases was drama and documentary, whereas those in the biopic were the least. It can be seen that comedy took the largest proportion of British annual revenue.

 In 2012, the kinds of drama and documentaries took the lead in all released, with 35 (23.6%) each;
however
, the percentage of revenues was only made 8.3% and 2.9%, respectively.
In contrast
, the types of comedy ranked
second
, with 26 (17.6%), whereas it accounted for almost half (45.4%) of annual sales.

 The horror genre was higher than the thrillers, at 14 (9.5%) and 13 (8.8%);
however
, it is worth noting that the profits from horror films were 20 times thriller movies, which stood at 20.2% and 1.3%, respectively.
Although
 the number of releases in the biopic was only 1, it contributed to almost 1 in 10 ticket earnings.
Likewise
, the romance ones were launched 5 in the year, whilst it was the lowest proportion of profits from sold tickets.
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