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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment what damage does plastics do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #plastics #government #individuals
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Environment
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The environment
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 has become more and more
pollution
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 in recent years. Some people believe that one of the causes of environmental
problem
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problems
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 is
plastic
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products
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 that people throw away into
river
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rivers
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,
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and ocean
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ocean
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oceans
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. As we know
plastic
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products
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such
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 as
plastic
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 bags,
plastic
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 bottles,
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plastic
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and plastic
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 packaging
are
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is
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harm
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 to the earth.
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, the essay will look at how
plastic
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 has negative effects on
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environment
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the environment
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 and
also
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 mention government’s
action
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actions
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 can prevent or protect
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environment
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the environment
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.
First
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 of all,
plastic
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 items have damaged
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environment
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the environment
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 seriously.
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,
plastic
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bottle
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bottles
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such
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 as cokes or
pepsi
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 bottles
are
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is
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 thrown into
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ocean
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the ocean
an ocean
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that
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which
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cause
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causes
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 sea
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environment
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environmental
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 pollution.
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 harms sea animals like fish or
shrimps
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shrimp
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are
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that are
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 stuck and died.
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Secondly
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,
plastic
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 bags
and
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apply
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are found in
the
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apply
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landfill that cannot
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be disposed
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disposed
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 and cause
bad
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a bad
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smell
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into
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 the air which causes air pollution.
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 affects people’s health.
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, in order to protect
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environment
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the environment
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,
government
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the government
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 may enact strict
law
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laws
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 on
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environment
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environmental
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 protection. The local council punish or
fine
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 individuals who do not throw away
plastic
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products
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 in the right place or trash or bin.
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,
government
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the government
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 may build landfill or
solution
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solutions
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 to reuse
plastic
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products
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 to avoid
throw
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 them away into
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ocean
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.
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, individuals need to be educated about how to protect
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environment
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the environment
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 and sort of rubbish. People need to
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be ware
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aware
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ware
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 of
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environment
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environmental
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 issues and take immediate action to reduce
plastic
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 bottles in the
ocean
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. These actions may help to solve
environmental
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the environmental
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problem
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problems
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 and protect the Earth healthier.
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