DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THE FOLLOWING STATEMENT? MOST EXPERIENCE IN OUR LIVES THAT SEEMED DIFFICULT AT THE TIME BECOME VALUABLE LESSSONS FOR THE FUTURE. USE REASONS AND SPECIFIC EXAMPLES TO SUPPORT YUR ANSWER.

It is an undeniable fact that in our
day to day
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lives, multifold people
facing
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difficulties in their every step of
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their lives
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lives
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life
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and
life
also
teach some precious experiences. I completely agree with the above statement and in
this
essay, I will discuss some reasons and specific examples as well to support my opinion.
To begin
,
life
is
about
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full of challenges and every induvial face difficult situation during their
life
span. Sometimes, we are facing some difficulties and become sad during that bad
time
.
For instance
, after
completed
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my graduation, I sent many resumes and CV as well to
the
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different pharmaceutical companies. Unfortunately, they all
were
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rejected my application, but that rejection which I
gain
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from them made me strong and in my present
job
, I am so happy because I used the techniques and grab many offers where I work.
This
is one of the reasons for
success
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the success
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of my today’s
life
.
Secondly
, there is another threatening experience of my
life
is
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that is
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worth mentioning. After
completed
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completing
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of bachelor, every student
facing
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faces
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some crisis related to
continue
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continuing
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the
masters
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or doing a
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part-time
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part
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part-time
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time
job
.
For example
, when I completed my bachelor from the subject
of
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microbiology, I
was
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thought
that
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to do a
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part-time
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part
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time
job
in
dairy
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a dairy
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or lab, but my parents were against my opinion and they refused that. At that
time
, I feel angry
on
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with
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them, but
then
I realize that they were right because if I am doing both
job
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jobs
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as well as
masters
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master's
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in
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at
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same
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the same
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time
then
I did not focus on my studies. And when I got
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my master
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master
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master's
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degree with distinction,
then
I felt that my parents were not wrong. Agglomerating all the above points elaborated, I would like to conclude that
life
is about full of good and bad
experience
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experiences
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and even though they seemed to be difficult sometimes,
but
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apply
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we have to face
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them it
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it
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and it
is
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also becomes
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also
become valuable lessons in our future.
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