Today’s famous
people
are more famous
thanks
to their expensive things than for their career and life,
this
fact will
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a bad for young humans.
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and disadvantageous
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famous
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life. In my opinion, I agree with
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text, For reason that
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plenty of young
people
want a lot of money, despite the rewards.
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the main reason why I agree
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is respect for
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person
with
this
conclusion, some
people
that know about life fate, know which cases were of some famous
people
do not want to experience
such
a fate. A great number of popular
people
have success
thanks
to
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determination and hard work. The world recognized him as special and his popularity.
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is
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popular football player. He’s fate was hard, but he can
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the goal
thanks
to desire and hard work. It is very commendable and a few
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can do it.
On the other hand
,
Thanks
to expensive things it can make famous
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and raise popularity.
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of young
people
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depending on the main reason of
person
could become famous. In fact, examples of famous
people
whom they consider successful encourage them to behave in
this
way when they would like to get rich, rather than doing something that can benefit society.
In conclusion, I agree with
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paragraph, I think a lot of
people
should know a famous
person
before for copied
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actions for
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or any actions from him. Because it is very important for fans, they can copy their idol and
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their opportunities.
However
it is not giving
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for good future jobs, and
people
must understand how to act.