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Some people believe that the best way to control accidents on city streets is to lower the speed limit, but others think there are better ways to improve the safety on city streets. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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people
believe
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 that imposing
speed
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 limit is the best way to control road
accidents
, while
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others
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the
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view that there are other measures to curb the situation.
This
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these view
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 and arrive at a conclusion.
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 the one hand, speeding is the main
cause
 of
accidents
 on the roads. To explain
this
further
, when a vehicle is speeding, it not only results in losing the diver’s concentration
,
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 but
also
 narrows the vision.
Thus
, stopping the vehicle in an emergency becomes impossible. Speed driving can
cause
 huge
disaster
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in
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 busy streets
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 since it can damage several properties and human lives at the same time.
Hence
, I
also
 agree with
this
 sentiment.
For instance
, if a person caused an accident in a populated Colombo street the damage will be more, rather than happening the same accident on a remote village road.
On the other hand
,
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segment
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 of
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people
also
argue
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 that
speed
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 driving is not the only
cause
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increase
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 in
accidents
. They are of the view that using mobile phones while driving and driving under the influence of alcohol
are
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 more dangerous than speeding.
Thus
, having controls on speeding will have no significant impact and should impose strict laws and imposing heavy fines on traffic violations should be the way to curb the situation.
However
, when compared with other traffic violations speed driving causes the most damage to
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human property.
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, in order to protect
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pedestrian
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 lives it is important to have speed limits.
Hence
, I oppose
latter
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 argument. In conclusion, people are having different views on the effectiveness of imposing speed limits to avoid
accidents
.
However
, speeding will reduce
the
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concentration and narrows the driver's vision, which can easily
cause
accidents
.
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