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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think
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 financially. Because human beings do not need them necessarily, I actually can not entirely agree with the point. In my view, it is absurd that wild
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 have no place in the 21st century. I do not think that the planet's existence is only for people's profit. In
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 centries, we still can not use any power to prompt the species extinction.
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, we do not see any reasons to neglect the environment of wild
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. Indeed, humankind ought not to come invasion or damage
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 region of them for that we can have a much stronger population. We possess enough space to coexist with wild species, so much better together with them is an important object. I am afraid I disagree with the view that protecting wild
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 is a waste of resources. It's a necessary guarantee that the natural guard habitat. Most scientists
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 agree that the habitat is crucial to own selves.
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, rainforests produce oxidation and absorb carbon dioxide, stable the climate of all planet. If we overlook the influence, even destroying the area where wild
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 survive, the expenditure will well surpass the cost of protecting natural habitats. So in
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 way, we will keep the ecological balance for all the living bodies in the world. In a word, we do not have the right to decide if wild
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 should exist. What we can do is protect them and do our best.
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