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TASK 2: Some people think that competitive sports should be included as a subject in school, while others believe that it has negative effect on children. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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Adolescents are strongly influenced by famous
people
, they believe that these stars are the perfect example to follow to have success in life. I believe
this
 thought can have a negative development on young souls
,
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 because many are not able to distinguish what
it
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is right and what is wrong to emulate. By doing
this
 they could end up
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copying some bad actions done by their idol. Juveniles tend to be inspired by famous
people
 because they believe that if they copy their actions and lifestyle they will become popular too.
Therefore
, it happens often that especially young boys, during the stages of middle and high school, begin to wear certain clothes and
to
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behave in a certain manner just to be like their idol.
For example
, many scholars tend to
This
 trend,
however
, can have negative aspects if those students are not able to separate what
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is right to do and what is wrong.
For example
, in
Italy
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 many guys are inspired by the Italian rap scene which in different songs talks about drugs, baby gangs, and robberies.
As a
result
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 many groups of young
people
 are formed with the aim of causing chaos in their towns. To conclude, I believe that emulating famous
people
 can lead to negative behaviours by
this
 young generation who is not able to differentiate what is correct to do and what is incorrect, ending up
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copying bad lifestyles that will ruin their growth.
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