Some people argue that in the future, teachers will be displaced by the growth of computers. How far do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that in the future, teachers will be displaced by the growth of computers. How far do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people say in order to prevent illness and disease governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that it is better for students to study in a group while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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