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Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

#experiences #lives #time #lessons #future
In our
lives
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 we have many difficult
experiences
. Most of them felt hard at that
time
.
However
, in the
future
 these
experiences
 become precious to that person. I agree with the given statement and give reasons and perfect examples to support it in the body paragraph.
First
 and foremost, a number of
people
 have tough events in their lives that seem difficult at that
time
 but in the
future
 these events become precious as they learn a lesson from these and become successful in
future
. Explain
furthermore
, most
of
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successful
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the successful
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people
 get success by
learned
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learning
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 from their mistakes.
For example
, a study by the university of Tokyo revealed that most wealthy and successful
people
 said that failure is the best way to become successful.
Thus
, these
experiences
 are precious.
Moreover
, most of the
time
 we face hard times because of their small and big mistakes.
However
, these become good memories in the
future
 and they feel good in
future
. As they remember
their
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time
 when they start their career.
For instance
, an article published by
Times
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the Times
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 of Newyork says that most
high level
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people
 said that
time
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the time
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when they do their
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, when they do their first job,
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first
 job is the most valuable
time
 to them. They
also
 said that they felt it was difficult at that
time
. In conclusion, I agree with it because these
experiences
 are precious as they become good memories and teach us good lessons.
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