In the modern society a vast variety of fashionable cloths can be seen at each and every kinds of shops round the world. Some people believe that the inside of a person can judge by their choice of cloths. I am totally disagree with the argument. This essay will discuss in detail and provide relevant evidence to prove the opinion.

In
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modern society
vast
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variety of fashionable
cloths
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can be seen in
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each and every
kinds
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of
shops
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round
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the world. Some
people
believe that
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of
people
can be judged by their choice of wearings. I
am totally disagree
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with the argument.
This
essay will discuss
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detail and provide relevant evidence to prove the opinion.
First
and foremost, there is a famous statement
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"Don not judge the book by its cover". So I believe that
this
is often correct because there are lots of professionals who provide valuable services to
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society
such
as volunteer employees in social activities, environmentalists, journalists, charity workers, etc,
do
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fashion in their personal life.
Furthermore
, some politicians in some of the developing countries wear fully white dresses to impress others that they have no dirty in their lives, but most of them are not good in
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characters according to my personal experience.
Therefore
, it is better to evaluate a person by analyzing their qualities. The other thing that I would like to emphasize is that the way of thinking regarding
people
by their outfits has been
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from
king's
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age as I believed personally because there were different types of
dress-codes
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according to their service to the king. There were
blue-color
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and
white-color
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jobs and they might use for
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casual events to maintain their status.
As a result
, according to
such
things
people
tend to evaluate others by considering
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dress. To conclude, the traditional thinking pattern of trying to evaluate a person on his or her outer appearance has come across from the ruling pattern in
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history which is not commonly giving a correct judgment of a person. So it is better to eliminate
such
kinds of outdated thinking patterns from
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modern society.
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