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Open-plan office no walls no barriers. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, working styles and offices have changed.
For instance
, working remotely or working in an
office
 without any walls and obstacles,nowadays is usual in some companies which have both merits and demerits, I am going to discuss them. From a psychological point of view , working in a limitless
office
 not only brings
people
 a feeling of freedom, but
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also
 makes
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motivation for them to work more efficiently.
Furthermore
, other advantages of these offices are that
,
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people
 will be encouraged to communicate far better with each other
,
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 since there are no walls and doors.
Moreover
,
people
 can think
out
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 of
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 much easier when there are no walls and doors around them.
On the other hand
, some
people
 might suffer from a lack of privacy.
Hence
, imagine that everyone can see your screen and can listen to your voice when you call a person. If you want to tell something significant privately,
then
 you must go out of the
office
 which does not seem comfortable. In another statement, the more limitless
office
 , the less privacy will be.
Last
 but not least,
although
 an open working area has some advantages , we can not deny the negative part of it.
Furthermore
, I can confidently mention that privacy
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 the working area is one of the remarkable factors for employees. If they can not feel relaxed during working , they may make a mistake , which will be a big problem for them and the company as well, so I think that separate rooms' advantages are more compared to the shared areas.
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