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Dear Sir or Madam Hi my friend
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am Malika
Firstly
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ask you sorry because
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do
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one thing without your permission Namely
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apply for a journalism course
instead
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you
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am writing
this
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letter to say
this
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new
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news
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and they plan to talk to you
One day
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saw an announcement when
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was going to work It
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about free journalism course
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know, you interested in journalism and you intend to be
journalist
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a journalist
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in the future So intend to help you to
achive
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achieve
your goal
That is
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why
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apply for it
instead
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you
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assume
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for you.After
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send to their website information about you
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wait 2 days
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respond
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. And
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decided
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will
not tell you about it
untill
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until
they send their reply. So that
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do not want to you are berefit. Today it was
camed
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claimed
named
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letter
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you as soon as receive it.
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hope that to you do not refuse it and you are
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function Your faithfully Malika
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task response
The essay lacks a clear response to the task prompt. The purpose of the letter is not effectively communicated, and the content does not directly address the task requirements.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but they lack coherence and do not effectively frame the content of the letter. The ideas are not logically linked, leading to a lack of cohesion and coherence.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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