University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the Internet for students to read and so, the importance of attending face to face lectures has been reduced.

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the most
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, it makes our life faster and easier and
education
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excuse. In my opinion,
this
is a good direction how to improve
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and make it more efficient. Students used to visit
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and spend a
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time
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appropriate sources of
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knowledge
knowladge
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, but the
Internet
changes
this
way of things. For
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, if people had all information just
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their mobile
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, they would not need waste
time
to
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find
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convenient
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convinient
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convenient
book
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books
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all over the
Internet
.
Thus
, students have more free
time
to study subjects
instead
of looking for information.
Consequently
, it will develop
education
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system and lead
for
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a better marks
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.
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this
approach can help teachers. They will not need to repeat the same
leactures
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lectures
each
time
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if they recorded them. In
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they will have more
time
to develop study
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materials
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materials
and pay more
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attention
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attention
for
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different aspects of learning.
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result
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student
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students
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should be more prepared for future work and they should be able better apply their skills. So, the
Internet
is a strong instrument, which can help people to become better and more educated. I have been learning everything from the
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because there are a lot of various books, lectures and courses. And all
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endless materials I have in one place and I have
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access
accsess
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access
to them from every point of the Earth.
Thus
, I think that in
education
with
internet
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there are no disadvantages and
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a combination
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of the
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and traditional
education
will
evelove
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evolve
education
and make it better.
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