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Young people are leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in cities.what are the reasons? Do advantages of their development outweigh it's disadvantages

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In the recent modern world, the number of young generations who head for metropolitan
areas
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 seeking
for
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better quality education and higher salary
jobs
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 has been increasing rapidly. For
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 trend, there are merits as well as drawbacks.
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 there are a few critical demerits of leaving
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their
ther
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their
 home countries, I believe there are more advantages for them to study or work in
cities
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. I would like to list both merits and demerits and state my view in
this
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 essay. The
first
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 reason for them to go to big urban centres is that they can get
better
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 education or they can pursue more promising and
high quality
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jobs
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.
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, they have more options for famous schools with
high quality
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 professors. Or, they can
apply
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jobs
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 at
multu
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multi
 national companies
which
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 salary is much higher than in rural
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.
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, crowded
cities
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 with more diverse citizens are stimulating for the young and they can enjoy
excitement
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 of living in
cities
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 rather than safe but boring rural
areas
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, metropolitan lives can provide them
beneficial
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 networks which they can nurture for the rest of their lives for prosperous futures.
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, there are a few
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critical
critial
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critical
 disadvantages of living in
cities
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. The
first
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 and the largest demerit for young people who left rural
areas
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 and come to busy
cities
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 is its negative impact
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 their physical conditions.
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, there are
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 trees and fields in city
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 and
density
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the density
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 of urbanization may force them to live in small apartments not as comfortable as their homes in regions.
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, the higher crime rate in
town
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 can be a serious risk for them. In conclusion, there are both merits and demerits of living in
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,
however
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, for those young people who seek
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good school educations or higher paying
jobs
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,
advantages
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the advantages
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 of coming out from their home town and making challenges for their future careers obviously outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Urbanization
  • Educational institutions
  • Job prospects
  • Wages
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural exchange
  • Overpopulation
  • Cost of living
  • Rural depopulation
  • Social isolation
  • Traditional values
  • Personal growth
  • Recreational activities
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