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Some people think that developed conutries have a higher responsibility to combat climate changes than developing countries. other believe that all the countries should have the same responsibility towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these view and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevent example from your own knowledge or experiance.

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Nowadays, the temperature has increased which directly affect
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human. So, some people think that
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developed
delevloped
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developed
countries
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responsibility
reseponsibility
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responsibility
 to fight against
changes
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However
 , other say that every the
countries
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responsibility
reseponsibility
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responsibility
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protecting the
environment
. I will discuss both these
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 of view and give my opinion in the ensuing
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paragraphs
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To begin
 with, some people think that developed
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countries
conutries
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countries
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technology
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 to fight
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against
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against
the
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climate
changes
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. These
countries
 had already developed infrastructure. So, they have enough found to protect the
environment
.
For example
, the United
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States
Stastes
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 ane of the
first
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countries
over
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 the world.
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,
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countries
 have only one responsibility
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how to protect the
environment
.
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developed
countries
 have
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 technology to
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 nature. On the
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other
othe
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 hand,
the
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developing
countries
 have
to
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responsibility
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such
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infrastructure
insfrastructure
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infrastructure
, health care, education and protecting the
environment
. The government plays
vital
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 role in
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developing
countries
 to manage. In
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addition
addtion
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, the government should apply laws for
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protecting
proecting
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protecting
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nature in developing counties. They should
banned
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 carbon dioxide
emission
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emissions
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 which declined air
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pollution
polltion
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pollution
.
For instance
, the Indian government promot
eletrical
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electrical
vechicals
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vehicles
 because
,
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 in the
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atmosphere
atmospheric
atmoshpere
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atmosphere
 carbon
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dioxide
dioxdie
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dioxide
 gas has been spread and it is
effecting
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to
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human bodies. In conclusion, these days
green house
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 gases are
incresed
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interested
increased
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atmosphere
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the atmoshere
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atmoshere
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atmosphere
.
As a result
, it is harmful
living
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creaturs
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creatures
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 and
also
 effecting to the future
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generation
genration
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generation
.
Therefore
, protecting the
environment
 is a
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responsibility
resonsibility
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responsibility
to
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 developed and developing
countries
 as well as
human
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a human
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being
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beings
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