Children today spend more time watching television than they did in the past. Describe some of the advantages and disadvantages of television for children.

Television
is a great discovery
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science which eventually had vast expansion in the current era. Considering an important part of
human's
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life.
Television
had many
impact
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impacts
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on
children
, and are too
much
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apply
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addicted to it. Excessive attachment to T.V for
children
have disadvantage and looking
to
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the other parts there are
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advantage
advantages
advanage
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advantages
too. As
television
has become
essential
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an essential
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gadaget
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gadget
gadgets
for every
individuals
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individual
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. Potentially it is an ideal machine which
provide
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provides
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us bundle
at
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information
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at our
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doorstep
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door step
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doorstep
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.
However
, it comes with many channels for
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entering
enterning
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entering
people
enjoy
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their respective
one
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ones
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.
Children
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in spite
inspite
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in spite
of reading books achieve
many
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much
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general and
education
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educational
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knowledge at home. Images on
television
are clearly understood by them. Kids enjoy their vacations and free time being busy with
it
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them
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. Many parents live their
sibbling
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sibling
alone at home due
their
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job, here
Television
becomes a supportive task for
children
and
are
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safe alone at home. Rather
going
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than going
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out of their place.
A part
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from it they don't feel lonely if they are kept alone at their house.
Television
strongly has many disadvantages unfortunately excess being
expossed
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exposed
exported
to it many spoil one's vision and
adverse
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have adverse
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effect
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effects
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to
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the eyes. So many
of
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the
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kids have to wear glasses from a very tin age. It
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affects
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effects
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affects
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while
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copying notes from
blackboard
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the blackboard
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on
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school.
Secondly
,
children
have forgotten
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to go
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outdoor
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outdoors
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to play
game
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games
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.
As a
result
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physical activities are decreasing and obesity in their
bosy
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body
bossy
is increasing. Having snacks and sitting
at
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a
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one place for
long
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a long
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time enjoying their favourite channels give them
relish
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to relish
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and
this
oppositely affects their growth and
push
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pushes
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them to become obese. I would like to conclude that
Finally
Television
is considered
as
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an idiot box even
it
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if it
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entertains much. Parents must take
in
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into
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grant
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about their
children
's activities should be done
in
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within
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a
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limited
limit
limite
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limit
.
Children
must be explained about the past activities done by their elders
,
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before there
were
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was
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no
television
. Parents should take their
children
in
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to
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garden
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the garden
a garden
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to have fun with physical exercise too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational programs
  • diverse cultures
  • entertainment options
  • language skills
  • critical thinking
  • social awareness
  • shared experience
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • inappropriate content
  • academic performance
  • attention problems
  • social skills
  • commercial influence
  • addiction
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