Children today spend more time watching television than they did in the past. Describe some of the advantages and disadvantages of television for children.
Television
is a great discovery Use synonyms
at
science which eventually had vast expansion in the current era. Considering an important part of Change preposition
in
human's
life. Change noun form
human
Television
had many Use synonyms
impact
on Change to a plural noun
impacts
children
, and are too Use synonyms
much
addicted to it. Excessive attachment to T.V for Correct quantifier usage
apply
children
have disadvantage and looking Use synonyms
to
the other parts there are Change preposition
at
Correct your spelling
advantage
advantages
advanage
too.
As Correct your spelling
advantages
television
has become Use synonyms
essential
Correct article usage
an essential
gadaget
for every Correct your spelling
gadget
gadgets
individuals
. Potentially it is an ideal machine which Change to a singular noun
individual
provide
us bundle Change the verb form
provides
at
Change preposition
of
information
at our Add an article
the information
Correct your spelling
doorstep
door step
. Correct your spelling
doorstep
However
, it comes with many channels for Linking Words
Correct your spelling
entering
enterning
people Correct your spelling
entering
enjoy
their respective Fix the infinitive
to enjoy
one
. Correct pronoun usage
ones
Children
Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
in spite
inspite
of reading books achieve Correct your spelling
in spite
many
general and Replace the quantifier
much
education
knowledge at home. Images on Replace the word
educational
television
are clearly understood by them. Kids enjoy their vacations and free time being busy with Use synonyms
it
. Many parents live their Correct pronoun usage
them
sibbling
alone at home due Correct your spelling
sibling
their
job, here Change preposition
to their
Television
becomes a supportive task for Use synonyms
children
and Use synonyms
are
safe alone at home. Rather Change the verb form
is
going
out of their place. Correct word choice
than going
A part
from it they don't feel lonely if they are kept alone at their house.
Correct your spelling
Apart
Television
strongly has many disadvantages unfortunately excess being Use synonyms
expossed
to it many spoil one's vision and Correct your spelling
exposed
exported
adverse
Add a missing verb
have adverse
effect
Fix the agreement mistake
effects
to
the eyes. So many Change preposition
on
of
Change preposition
apply
the
kids have to wear glasses from a very tin age. It Correct article usage
apply
Correct your spelling
affects
effects
Correct your spelling
affects
while
copying notes from Correct word choice
apply
blackboard
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the blackboard
on
school. Change preposition
in
Secondly
, Linking Words
children
have forgotten Use synonyms
going
Change the verb form
to go
outdoor
to play Replace the word
outdoors
game
. Fix the agreement mistake
games
As a
Linking Words
result
physical activities are decreasing and obesity in their Add a comma
,result
bosy
is increasing. Having snacks and sitting Correct your spelling
body
bossy
at
Change preposition
in
a
one place for Remove the article
apply
long
time enjoying their favourite channels give them Change the article
a long
relish
and Add the particle
to relish
this
oppositely affects their growth and Linking Words
push
them to become obese.
I would like to conclude that Correct subject-verb agreement
pushes
Finally
Linking Words
Television
is considered Use synonyms
as
an idiot box even Change preposition
apply
it
entertains much. Parents must take Correct word choice
if it
in
Change preposition
into
grant
about their Add an article
the grant
children
's activities should be done Use synonyms
in
a Change preposition
within
Correct your spelling
limited
limit
limite
. Correct your spelling
limit
Children
must be explained about the past activities done by their eldersUse synonyms
,
before there Remove the comma
apply
were
no Change the verb form
was
television
. Parents should take their Use synonyms
children
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
to
garden
to have fun with physical exercise too.Add an article
the garden
a garden
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