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Band 5

Psychologists have known for many years that color can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention to be given to color schemes when decorating work places such as offices and hospitals.

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The issue of whether
people
 should focus on the tone of location or not is creating a passionate debate; many
people
 support the state of the impact of
color
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 schemes on emotions. The writer of
this
 essay strongly believes that there are valid
agruments
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arguments
 for both sides, but
tend
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 to agree with the statement. There can be no doubt that tones of
color
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 have an influence on how
people
 feel. If you ever watch movies, you can see that in the different
story
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,
it
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they
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 use different shades of
color
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colour
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, which has
impact
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 audiences’ moods.
Likewise
, many
health care
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healthcare
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 centers, where
people
 have images of dangerous and unsafe
location
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locations
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, usually paint the place with white
color
 because it makes patients feel comfortable,
relax
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 and feel safe. Some groups of
people
 think that if they have a new
work place
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workplace
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, they will consider
about
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apply
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color
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colors
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 that match the objective of the place and what they want visitors to feel.
On the other hand
, we have to accept that some
people
 might
has
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 attention
for
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to
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 the functions of decorations, which are
practicle
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practical
 for
that
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those
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 places.
For instance
,
instead
 of
select
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selecting
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 from
the
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apply
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color
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colour
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, most hospitals are chosen from the ability and service mind of doctors and
nurse
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nurses
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. In a similar
ways
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way
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, If some
people
 wanted to take a rest and watch some
serise
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series
, drama, or movie, they would interested in either the plot of that story or the
actres
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actress
 list. To
sumerize
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summarise
 everything that has been started, one thinks that shades of wall
color
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colour
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 and
funitures
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furniture
 need to be considered;
while
 others
agrue
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argue
agree
 that it is unnecessary. In my opinion, I agree with the
fomer
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former
 because
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resonable
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reasonable
 reasons and my personal experiences.
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introduction
Your introduction effectively presents the debate around the topic, but there is a minor grammatical issue. It should be 'the tone of locations' instead of 'the tone of location'.
supported main points
Make sure to support your main points with more concrete examples and clearer explanations. For instance, explaining specific psychological studies that support the idea would add strength.
relevant specific examples
In the second paragraph, consider elaborating on how colors like blue or green may impact different environments like offices specifically, making your points more diverse and supported.
grammar
There are multiple grammatical and spelling errors throughout your essay. Paying attention to these will significantly improve your overall score.
conclusion
The concluding paragraph reiterates your stance well, but could benefit from a brief recap of the key points discussed.
task achievement
The essay adequately addresses both sides of the argument, which is a notable strength.
supported main points
Your use of examples, such as movies and hospitals, successfully illustrates your points.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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