In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sport or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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you have to get more responsible and it will help you become more responsible.I believe you will not be a successful person unless you try it and get more practice in it. In conclusion , I would state that the world is moving fast with the growing trend of hiring personal trainers and these resources are impacting negatively development in

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In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sport or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and giver your own opinion.

Some people fail in schools, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in the case?

As science and technology contribute most to the development of society, science students should get more financial support from the government than students in other fields (e.g. business, language). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Government investment in the art such as music, theater, is a waste of money. government must invest money in public service instead. Do you agree or disagree?

You recently notice a local restaurant that was offering a part-time Job. Write a letter to the restaurant’s manager. •Explain that you would like to apply for the job •Give some details of any relevant experience that you have •Specify the days and times that would suit you.