In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Unemployment
is one of the trivial problems which affects countries around the globe. The no of highly qualified graduates is on a rise.
This
issue
also
gives rise to other issues in the economy and hampers the nation's growth as a whole. In the forthcoming, paragraphs we look at the reasons for
this
trend and a solution to encounter the
problem
will be explored.
To begin
with ,there are several reasons for the growing
unemployment
.
Firstly
the population of several developing countries like India,UK etc are on the rise, whereas the no of
jobs
has not increased.
This
has created a great demand and supply gap and
further
worsen the
problem
of
unemployment
. ,
Secondly
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the world is moving towards automation and
hence
labour intensive
jobs
are decreasing .There are fewer but specialized
jobs
.,
Also
the education provided at colleges and universities has become redundant as most of it is based on old curriculum. In the modern ,world today there
exist
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exists
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a massive skill gap and
this
is one of the reasons why joblessness is increasing. The solutions to counter
this
problem
are as
follow
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.
Firstly
education provided should be improved and the focus must be on making individuals for the global job market. ,
Secondly
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government
should encourage entrepreneurship by designing better policies.,
Moreover
government
should make doing business easier in the country.
This
will ensure more companies are attracted to the country and will ensure better employment generation. Transparent and fair hiring in
government
jobs
should be encouraged.fourthly, local businesses must be encouraged and proper training should be provided. To hammer the
last
nail, I would like to conclude that though
unemployment
is a major
problem
it can be tackled by taking proper measures both by the
government
and the individuals.
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