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The table shows some information about
subway
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the subway
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 systems of
London
,
Paris
 and
Moscow
. It compares three
feature
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features
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 relating to the size of each
subway
 system, these features are
total
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the total
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 track
length
 of the system both underground and on the surface,
number
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a number
the number
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 of
stations
 in
the
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apply
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operation and
number
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the number
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 of daily passengers.
London
 underground which is about 400
kilometer
Change to a plural noun
kilometers
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 long,
comparing
Wrong verb form
compared
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 to
other
Correct article usage
the other
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 two
subway
 systems, is the longest
one
.
Moscow
metro
 with
the
Correct article usage
a
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length
 of 300
kilometer
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kilometre
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 is the second and the
last
one
 in
length
 feature is
Paris
metro
 with approximately 200
kilometer
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kilometre
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length
Change preposition
in length
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.
In
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On
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contrary
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the contrary
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Paris
Add a comma
,Paris
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metro
 has the most
number
 of
stations
 in operation with 300
stations
. Following by
London
 underground with 275
stations
.
Moscow
metro
 with only 182 active
station
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stations
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 is the
last
one
.
Moscow
metro
,
on the other hand
, is the most crowded
one
 with 6.5 million passengers daily;
while
Paris
Correct article usage
the Paris
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metro
 and
London
 underground have 4.5 and 3 million passengers respectively. In summary,
London
 has the longest
subway
,
Paris
metro
 has the most
number
 of
stations
 and
Moscow
 is the most crowded of all.
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