Stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggests?
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Then
, I have 2 solutions for these problems. First
, the government will make sure the welfare benefit can go to everyone
in the country because that can help everyone
with their cash problems. Second
, the government will make sure the companies give enough holidays to all employees in the company.
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