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More and more people are buying through the online shopping. Do you think, it is positive or negative development

#people #development
The
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 number of individuals
prefer
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prefers
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 purchasing items on the
internet
. From my point of
view
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 it is
the
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apply
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positive perfection. There is no doubt that social networking helped
to
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a lot of people to buy some kind of essential and
rarely
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 things online at the right time without spending it. As a matter of
fact
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 purchasing thing on the
internet
 helps people to find almost all kinds of
stuffs
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stuff
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 everywhere and
every
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at every
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 time. Nowadays there
are
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the
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a
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 number of online markets,
such
 as “Alibaba" or “Amazon Inc.” which
services
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service
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to
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humans around the world. The main beneficial side of
this
, they are always available almost everywhere, which solves some kind of
humans
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human
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 purchasing problems.
For
example
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 there can be situations when
person
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a person
the person
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 is not able to go to the malls or to supermarkets because of his or her condition, so at that time they prefer buying products online. To be sure, online shopping has some kind of uncommon discomforts with the things,
such
 as
safety
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 of items or fake information on the
internet
 markets. Perhaps, so that some people do not like purchasing online. In
final
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 analysis, despite
of
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the fact socializing online markets
are
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 getting popular and the most preferable. For
this
 reason, I am convinced that
internet
 publishing is a positive development in general.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant gratification
  • rapid advancement
  • instant communication
  • online shopping
  • fast food delivery
  • social media platforms
  • immediate feedback
  • recognition and validation
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • convenience
  • decreased patience
  • delayed gratification
  • realistic expectations
  • work ethic
  • unrealistic expectations
  • stress
  • dissatisfaction
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