More and more people are buying through the  online shopping in the last decade.. Do you think, it is positive or negative development.

Over the 10 years, there has been
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increase in
number
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of
people
who are purchasing products via online shopping. From my point of view, shopping online is
positive
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development. There is no doubt that
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it has some beneficial sides
of
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online shopping for our public. For one,
this
kind of process of shopping creates the convenience of buying
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for our crowd. For
this
reason, if somebody going to buy something
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the traditional way of
people
, it may be
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significantly
sigaficantly
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significantly
difficult situation to purchase the products and deliver them
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the house.
However
, if it is to be
a
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online shopping service, it would have many
convenience
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of online shopping, even with the free delivery service.
For example
, at the present time, there have been living many disabled and busy
people
all over the world,
thus
online shopping can create
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actual serviceability
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for these types of humans. On the  other hand, I still believe that it
also
has  some negative aspects on our society. It is
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that online
sale
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may mislead
to
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people
and
this
can cause  some problems between
company’s
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staff and
consumer
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consumers
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.
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, there has been
increasing
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number of conflicts between
consumer
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consumers
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and online
shopper
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shoppers
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because of wrong
informations
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about the products which are
selling
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on
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the
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online shops. But, traditional
way
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of purchasing
are
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not much helpful rather than online shopping. In
final
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analysis, despite the fact that online shopping has some disadvantages. It cannot prevent
to pick
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up goods
by
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online websites, for
this
reason
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online shopping
include
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some positive trends like
convenience
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the convenience
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and free delivery service.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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