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Genetic engineering is a dangerous trend. It should be limited. To what extend do you agree?

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Some
people
argued
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 that Genetic engineering is dangerous and
it
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should
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be limited. there several effects on lives. But we can see the brighter side of Genetic engineering.
Therefore
, I will explain the advantages of Genetic engineering in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are many benefits to the agricultural industry.
Firstly
, the production of crops has increased with the
use
 of Genetic engineering.
Therefore
, many
people
 survive starvation and get fed.
secondly
, with the
use
 of Genetics,
engineering
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 the farmer can save crops of insects and other diseases.
Moreover
, scientists
also
 experiment in the agriculture industry
of
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use
 gens and producing different breeds which experiments
also
 apply to crops and are successfully worked.
As a result
, nowadays we can see a new breed of vegetables and fruits.
For example
, the magazine of agriculture in 2019 showed a rising supply of vegetables and fruits in India because of Genetic engineering.
In addition
, Genetic engineering
also
uses
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 in human beings. These days research on drug
use
 to genetic engineering which helpful in inherent diseases.
For instance
, in a survey of time in India in 2020, 60% of
people
 recovered from the
last
 stage of cancer used genetic engineering. There are many drugs or
medician
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medicines
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 made in the
use
 of Genetic engineering which cures humans.
Therefore
, the human life span is improved and
people
 live life healthy. In conclusion, Genetic engineering has a lot of advantages that outweigh disadvantages not only for humans but
also
agriculture
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.
Therefore
, I am against the given point of view.
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