You have seen an advertisement in Australian magazines for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child write a letter # Explain why you would like this # Give detail of why you are a suitable person to employ # Say how would you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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letter in reference to the advertisement you gave in a Sunday magazine published on 25th November in which you were looking for a person who can stay at your place, meanwhile, look after your six-year-old child. I find myself suitable for

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job due to the fact that I have a few years of experience in

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babysitting

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baby sitting

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, I am

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searching for a residence in Australia as I recently moved here. Let me give you some details about my work experience and qualification. I graduated from university about 5 years ago. I had a daughter to take care of,

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, I took a break from a professional career.

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, I

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worked in a

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daycare

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day care

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centre, where I used to give elementary education to children.

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, I have plans to visit certain places in Australia while I am still here. Especially, Sydney is a city I would love to see. I would appreciate it if you could give me a few days off every month so that I go to these places. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Leo

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
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for example
for instance
therefore
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even though
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

191 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

It is a natural process for animals species to become extinct.

Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive development or a negative one? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples fromyour own knowledge or experience.