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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this?

Nowadays,due to technological advancements and various kinds of facilities ,individuals believe that
this
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 contemporary
era
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 is the best
time
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 in history to
life
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.I profoundly agree with
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 view , and
this
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 essay will support my ideology before a logical conclusion is drawn.
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,
humans
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 benefit from more conveniences than in the past.
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,individuals had to travel a long distance through a deteriorated dust road to provide their families with food and beverage.while,Nowadays,
humans
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 are capable to travel among the continents.
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,according to the Iata website report,it only takes 16 hours to fly
Singapore
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from Singapore
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 to New York.
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,
this
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era
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 has reputation for communicating.it means
humans
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 are able to communicate with each other promptly.while,in the past,human beings had to deal with a lot of disturbances to communicate with others since there were no telephones or cell phones.
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,modernization shows its indispensable role in our society because
humans
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 should work just eight hours of their
lives
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 .while,in the past, mankind had to work for too long hours.
On the other hand
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,there is one
time
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 which seems really fascinating for
humans
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.It would be wonderful to live in the
next
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 century.
First
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,
humans
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 will be able to benefit
other
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from other
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 aspects of their
lives
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.
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,according to Ilan Mask’s tweet,by 2030,individuals will have been provided with some microchips in their bodies which allow them to gain any experiences they would like for free.
moreover
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,citizens will not be forced to work or study for a long
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.Since
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any information they require will be implemented in their brains.so,any unbelievable thing will be realised. To conclude , there are lots of contrasts between today's life and the past.I profoundly agree that
this
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era
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 is the best
time
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of
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in
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 history because we are able to access any sort of information , and
in
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 constantly benefits our
lives
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 .
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,in
this
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 contemporary
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era
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,era
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 we see many conveniences in our
lives
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 which changed it
to
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into
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 the best
time
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 to live in history.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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