In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tution fees. Not all students can afford them, so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. Do you agree or disagree with this?

Going to
university
has become really expensive,
students
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and students
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who want to attend higher
education
need to pay high tuition fees. These taxes,
however
, are unaffordable for many,
thus
people
believe that
university
education
should be free. I agree with
this
opinion because I believe that
university
should be
a
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opportunity for everyone without any difference in their social status. A free
university
system would lead to a more prepared and more
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selection
selectioned
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selected
society.
This
because
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in a utopistic world where
university
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the university
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is free,
students
, in my opinion, would be required to pass a precise entry test to get into the college.
Moreover
,
this
system would be
more fair
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, because
students
would attend
university
courses just thanks to their prior knowledge acquired in
the
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earlier studies and not cause of their family's wealth.
For Instance
, several universities around the world do not require any entry test because of their high tuition fees that a few
students
can afford.
Secondly
, young
people
would be
more keen
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to study with free higher
education
. In fact, nowadays many feel stressed when they study for
university
exams because behind them there is
a
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huge financial support
by
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their families.
As a result
, some
students
feel guilty towards their
family
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families
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when they do not get a satisfying result. With free Universities,
students
would be more relaxed and would look to
University
education
as a pleasant opportunity and not as a journey of
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sufferance
difference
suffering
. In conclusion,
although
some
people
believe that
university
education
should be for a few
people
, I believe that higher
education
should be affordable to everyone who is able to demonstrate
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the right skills
to begin
this
hard journey.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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