Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, but others believe that should not go to school until they are older. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Educated youth is
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. Few people believe that
children
should go to
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school and get the proper
education
that they need until they get
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the proper
age
, while several people argue that at
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young
age
when
children
started to talk and walk they should be going to school already. In my
opinion
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there are pros and cons
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both
idea
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. I believe that parents should be the
first
teacher of
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young
children
. When a
child
starts to learn how to talk and walk,
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is where
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education
starts.
Education
is not only about learning how to write, learn the alphabet, solving the mathematical problem, rather
education
for me is teaching a young
child
how to socialize,
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how to get up when she or he fell and correcting a
child
that it is okay to have a mistake,
the most important is
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but the most important is also
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to
enculcate
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inculcate
to their young minds that mistakes are unavoidable since it is
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human nature,
however
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mistakes can be corrected and learn from it. A young
child
that is
educated at home
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the
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young
age
will not be vulnerable to
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bullies inside the school since he was taught at home how to face any danger at
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young
age
. On the other view,
children
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older when they
starts
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schooling,
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are already faced
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world.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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