physical education should be ommitted from the curriculum. Do you agree?
Many people say that physical education should be eliminated from school subjects. I completely oppose that statement because of the reasons which are written below. Physical activities could improve body health and
also
can aid to maintain our body's physical status. The people who agree with the statement of removing physical education may be concerned about other subjects which are taught in schools.
On the one hand, Physical activity such
as running and jogging can increase the body's heart
rate and improve the circular system and the muscle which name is the heart
. If the heart
rate increase, the heart
will supply better nutrition and can lead to improvement in general torso health. However
, it can influence mental health too. The number of the
Correct article usage
apply
heart beats
Correct your spelling
heartbeats
have
a direct influence on the brain's turnover and outcome.Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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