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Some argue today that schools are no longer necessary because children can learn so much from the internet and be educated at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Is it argued today that schools are no longer important since
children
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 can learn from the
internet
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 and be taught at
home
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.
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This
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 mode of learning was introduced back from the start of
pandemic
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the pandemic
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, particularly Covid virus infestation, which paved
way
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 for convenient
education
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 at
home
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 and at the same
time
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, securing the safety of
children
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.
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, various crucial aspects of a child’s mental and social development were being neglected. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will point out that learning in schools is still the best and
effective
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way
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 of receiving quality
education
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 than having it at
home
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. The fun
way
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 of face-to-face learning in schools will not be
that
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 same
in
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 virtual lectures at
home
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. One thing that can help a child in retaining knowledge is a motivating environment which is not possible in a
home
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 study. And without stimulation from a lively environment, eagerness to learn will not be felt and boredom will overpower.
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, active participation
as well as active listening
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 is limited in online
classes
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.
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, everyone wants to speak but not all
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 given the chance because of the limited
time
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. Conflicts on
geographical
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the geographical
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 side arise in the practice of online
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,
that
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it
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 is limited and not even feasible in some rural
areas
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.
Internet
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 connection varies from one location to another. And most of the
time
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, it is not yet installed in remote
areas
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. In fact, not all people living in
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far flung
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areas
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 have electricity to start with. And since life there is impoverished, people are more on survival than on embracing modernization in the
way
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 of
education
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.
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, the convenience of learning at
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that is
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 attained through virtual
classes
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 helped families in
such
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 ways that it can save them
time
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 and effort. With the availability of online
classes
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,
children
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 can stay and learn at
home
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 with their parents. In
this
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 mode of
education
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, parents can be hands-on in guiding their
children
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 through their modules
thus
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foster
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 quality family
time
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. In conclusion,
children
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 attaining
education
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 through
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internet
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the internet
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 at
home
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 facilitates comfort and bonding among families;
however
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,
quality
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the quality
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 of learning is lessened with limitations
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 as an environment not conducive
for
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 learning and unavailability of
internet
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 resources due to location constraints in isolated
areas
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. And with these struggles, a child’s learning and social needs are being restricted.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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