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Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to the world scenario,
people
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 who do criminal activities are tended to be given punishments no matter what type of illegal activity. Some
people
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 hold the view that giving prison punishments for a longer time
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period is a better way to reduce criminal activities.
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, opponents believe that there are numerous ways to solve
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 issue. The following essay will elaborate on both of the topics with my opinion.
To begin
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 with, in the contemporary world many
people
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 are given life-long punishments according to the unlawful acts they have done. Sometimes, penalizing the individual is done for making them good citizens in the
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 or for the consequence of their
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. As an example, if a person kills another human he or she is given the death sentence or to be prisoned until their life.
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,
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 will convey a message or an important lesson to society that if you do any unlawful act in the
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 the repercussions will be serious,
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 these
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 will reduce crimes.
On the other hand
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, there are a plethora of ways to reduce criminal activities according to the
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 that a particular person has done. To exemplify, if an individual starts bulging or stealing the disciplinary procedure should be minimized as a life-long death sentence should not be appropriate for that person.
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, penalizing or fining these
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 can be one good method to avoid crime.
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, drug dealers or drug-addicted
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 can be put into rehabilitation centres so that their minds will eventually stop the violated
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 in the
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. To conclude, I partially agree with both of the viewpoints because to reduce crime the authorities should punish according to the level of crime individuals have done and convey a message to
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society that in
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 crimes will be eventually reduced.
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