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Although, more and more people read news on the internet, newspaper will remian the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspaper #remian #source
Some people think that
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 in future even if folks read
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internet
. I completely disagree with
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 is increasing day by day. People nowadays
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 to be updated with all the happenings over the world they can easily search
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 they want and results will be in
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front of them when they blink their eyes. So if
internet
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 can
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 them updated
then
 it is obvious that people will minimize the
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 to meet their
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research indicates that in
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 only 15% of
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 is relying upon newspapers. So it is crystal clear that utilization of
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declined.
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, even if folks can search
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 a part of
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 will always
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 to depend on
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paper based
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 sources;
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old communities who do not have proper knowledge of using web browsers will always
use
 hard copies to
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 about latest circumstances going in
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For instance
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eye sight
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. So,
utilization
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 of
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 cannot be replaced. In conclusion, I tend to
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reiterate
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 that human beings are using
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 to
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 their means of current affairs
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paper based
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 means of news cannot be eliminated.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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