An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both side individuals and companies to shopping online ?

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Many people
prefer
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buy items rather online than do it by offline shops. In
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pros and cons
both
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customers
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and
sellers
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.
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,
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apply
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online shopping can be
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convenient
convinient
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convenient
for many people, there are could be several obstacles
for
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to
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doing it. If you get
item
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an item
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which is not good quality, you can face
problem
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with
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your
money
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, because
this
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proccedere
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is more difficult than
offline
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the offline
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market.
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, very often you
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able to touch
item
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the item
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which you have
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chosen
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chosen
before paying
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getting
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itgetting
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.
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, there are a lot of advantages as well.
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of wasting time
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going to a
shop
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,shop
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you can order delivery to your door
,
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because many
market places
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marketplaces
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suggest
this
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option for their clients.
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,
customers
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can have
a
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shopping for pleasure
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from
fom
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from
their own
home
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homes
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without
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necessity
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the necessety
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necessety
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necessity
to visit
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a shopping
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centre.
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,
the
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apply
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online shopping is more suitable for
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searching
serching
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searching
discounts
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for discounts
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that
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is
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are
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so important for many people from all over the world. Not only is online
shop
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convenient for
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the buyer
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buyer
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buyers
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, but
also
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sellers
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find it as
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an opportunity
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to
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,
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because they want to suggest the best service for their clients. According to
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approach, owns online shops need to suggest
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discounts
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for their
customers
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,
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therefore
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they can earn not enough
money
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for continuing
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business
buseness
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business
.
However
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,
such
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shops allow
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us to
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to save
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money
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on
a
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rent of
a
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office or house, because they need only
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a server
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server
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servers
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. One more con is the fact, that
a
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service delivery can
broke
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goods during a trip,
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that
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which
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is
also
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unpleasant
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the unpleasant
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situation, which makes
sellers
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spend a lot of
money
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for
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apply
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ordering new items.
Consequently
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,
online
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the online
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shopping brings
usefullness
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usefulness
rather for
customers
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than for
sellers
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, because
shop
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shops
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should be ready for wasting a lot of
money
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and time for attracting new clients and
organisation
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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