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I am currently a fourth-year student majoring in Computer Science at KAIST university, and I am looking for job opportunities
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winter. I have followed Randstad for several years and I feel very interested in its technological products that help match job seekers with promising companies. Recently, I discovered that Randstad is opening positions for Computer Vision engineers and
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excites me because it is my domain of interest. I believe that my strong relevant experience and teamwork
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will prove to be a valuable asset to your company. To get hands-on experience in working with Machine learning models, I joined the Vision and Learning Laboratory at KAIST
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year and worked as a research assistant.
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position provided me
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opportunity to collaborate with two other
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students and our team focused on developing deep Transformer models that can process large molecule datasets.
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taught me lots of valuable practical knowledge, including methods to optimize models’ performance and efficiency, large data processing techniques, and important Machine learning frameworks
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as Tensorflow, Keras, and Pytorch. Throughout
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, various issues emerged continuously, and by exploring new ways to solve them more quickly, my problem-solving
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had been enhanced significantly at the end of the
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. At KAIST, I
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took many courses about Machine learning and Computer Vision and achieved a lot of relevant experience from participating in projects delivered by these courses. One
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that I joined was in a team with three other students. We worked closely to develop the Yolo V1 model to detect objects from real-world image datasets. The model’s performance was unsatisfactory at
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. We had to collaborate over two months to figure out the problems and integrate new features that help boost the model’s accuracy. Through
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period, I learned appropriate communication
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that enabled me to communicate efficiently with my teammates which boosted the smoothness of our teamwork. I believe that these teamwork and communication
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in combination with the experiences that I have accumulated will make me a good fit for your company. My resume is
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attached to provide more details about my
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and achievements. I look forward to an in-person interview with you to have more detailed discussions. Please email me at [email protected] or call me at (+82)10-7251-8980 if you need more information. Thank you for your time and I hope to receive your response soon.
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