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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment what damage does plastics do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #plastics #government #individuals
These days,
plastic
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waste
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menace
menance
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menace
 has become alarmingly high in the environment. Most of the
plastic
 scraps are bags, bottles, and packing
materials
. There are several harmful effects
on
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 the unabated use of
plastic
materials
 on the ecosystem
such
 as
piling
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 up of
plastic
waste
materials
 and harmful effects on organisms.
However
, finding alternatives for the use of plastics and
make
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researches
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 and innovations in
plastic
waste
 management.
Firstly
, the piling up of
plastic
materials
 due to
it's
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its
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 non-biodegradable feature and obsolete recycling methods. These
waste
 mountains
becomes
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 a breeding house for many pathogens and mosquitos.
This
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in turn
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inturn
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in turn
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 spreads many harmful diseases like malaria, filaria,
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etcetera
etecetra
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and etecetra
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.
For
instance
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 the research conducted by Biology students of M. G. University regarding the harmful effects of
use
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the use
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 of
plastic
materials
 found that 60
percentage
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 of
Mosquito borne
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 diseases are due to the spurt of
plastic
waste
.
In addition
, the
plastic
 scrap dumping
bulkly
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bulky
bulkily
 in the ocean
is
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adversely affects
the
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aquactic
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aquatic
 life. Many
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newspaper
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news paper
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depicts
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the ill-fate
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ill-fate
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ill fate
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 of
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dolphins
dolfins
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dolphins
 and Whales
died
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who died
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 due to
having
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apply
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plastic
wastes
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waste
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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