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The maps illustrate the city of Nelson has changed considerably since 2000.

 In the year 2000, in the northeast of the main road was a town
centre
 where has been increased
to
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a bike rental scheme. On the left of the main
centre
 was an old market, which was on the south of the train station. Nowadays,
however
, the market has been turned into a new shop, while the train station moved to the north of the central city, becoming a new one.
Furthermore
, a new covered market is constructed on the east of the
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town
centre
. 

It is worth noting that the university has remained unchanged during these days, whereas it is built a tramline
next
 to it nowadays. The tree area in the northeast of the map has been replaced by a new shopping
centre
. The road for pedestrians only has taken the place of the original road.
Moreover
, in the south of the map today there are constructed a region with a restaurant and bars and clubs, nearby the port.
 Overall, it is evidence that the city of Nelson has undergone a number of changes over the years.
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