The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style . What are the advantages of this trend ? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

the rise of convenience
foods
has helped people keep up with the speed of modern
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life style
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. There is becoming increasingly popular to use fast
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and the other product of that to adapt people
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fast
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modern
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life style
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. there are numerous
of
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advantages and disadvantages to
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subject which will be. discussed in the following paragraphs. As far as I am concerned the drawbacks
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the benefits. for the
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, I will accord to the
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.
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says
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that the preservatives in the half made
foods
or
conserves
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has a horrible effect on
body
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, the sugar in soft drinks are play an axial role in kidney stone and high pressure and some related sickness. By the way of
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my
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grandmother
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grand mother
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has
high pressure
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disease and by using soft drinks
every thing
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get worth
than
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ever until she had been brain attack and she was almost dead.
this
kind of
foods
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has some positive
point
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but just when you accept the cons of
this
subject. Fast
foods
are so tasty and I do not think someday, can find someone that he says “fast
foods
has not the good taste”. half made
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and conserves help us to feed fast and save
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golden time. But these
foods
have some issues.
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has
price
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to pay and in
this
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cenario
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, that price is your health.
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is the judgment time, either health body or
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some time. according to what has already been discussed in
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essay there are many pros and cons that I can not mention all of them but in my
opinion
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the negativity of
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subject with authority has upper hand just
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my grandfather loves hotdog and
this
product has a key role in our diets. We eat
hotdog
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Too much, my little 12 years old brother is get like
hotdog
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, tall and thin.
Therefore
, all of my family has trouble with kidney stones.
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