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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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By reading
books
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,
people
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 can acquire knowledge, and it helps individuals to become wise. Nowadays,
people
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 prefer free reading
books
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through
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online,
instead
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 of reading physical
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 or
magazine
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magazines
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, for that reason, some
people
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 believe that in
coming
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the coming
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 times
people
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 will stop buying
books
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. I completely agree with that opinion as e-
books
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 are easy to get and there is no hassle to carry
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them
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. To commence with, reading
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online is so easy. No one needs any extra equipment to read or doesn’t need to collect
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 physically, as
people
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 always think that collecting
books
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 or buying them from any store or library is required
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 time. In that case, e-
books
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 obviously save a lot of time of peoples.
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, my friend Carol,
who
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used to read
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 in the library but nowadays, she read
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over
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online through her laptop or mobile, and she explains that it actually saves a huge amount of time.
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, physical
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 require an extra bag or
equipment’s
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equipment
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 to carry
it
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them
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, whereas carrying
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an e-book
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e-book
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e-books
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 is easy.
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 the contrary, anyone can bear these
books
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through
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with
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 a mobile phone only no extra bag is needed.
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, university students nowadays don’t use
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their bag
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bag
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bags
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any more
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anymore
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 rather than they read their all lectures on their mobile phones. Recently old
people
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 started reading on their mobile
phone
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phones
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, we can see
this
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 when old
people
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 in our society now used smartphones comfortably, and they said they
also
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 feel
comfort
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 to read
news
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the news
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 over
phone
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the phone
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. In conclusion, I would argue that as
people
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 are getting many benefits from reading
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over
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online because it’s easy to get,
also
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 it’s easy to carry,
consequently
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 in
future
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the future
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 individuals should stop
buy
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buying
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 printed
books
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
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  • access to
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