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Topic: a great city should not be confounded with a populous one. Discuss the above statement and give your own opinion

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The chart compares the share of
energy
 capacity in gigawatts (GW) for the period of 2015 and
predicted
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 share for 2040. For both years the
energy
 is most shared for fossil fuels, but the figures (differentiate) greatly. 64% of the proportion of
energy
 is given to fossil fuels, while only 44% of the
energy
 capacity is used for
this
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In contrast
, the predicted use of wind as a resource in 2040 is 12% compared with just 5% usage in 2015 for the same
energy
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 other renewables, with (contribution) 23% for all other renewable sources of
energy
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accounted for 21%.
Also
, for the predicted results in 2040, solar
energy
 takes 18%.
However
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solar
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 2%, preferring
instead
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nuclear
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 is predicted to decrease by 1% in 2040. In conclusion, there is a considerable variation in different types of
energy
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renewable
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types
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 of
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chemical
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 will be substituted by renewable
energy
 in the future.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Confound
  • Populous
  • Cultural heritage
  • Urban design
  • Sustainability
  • Quality of life
  • Efficient governance
  • Overcrowding
  • Infrastructure
  • Urban sprawl
  • Economic growth
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Public services
  • Metropolis
  • Urban planning
  • Environmental footprint
  • Inclusivity
  • Civic amenities
  • Heritage conservation
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