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Directors of organizations receive higher salaries than the ordinary worker, some people think it is necessary while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Directors
 of organizations get more compensation and money for their
work
. It is supported by some
people
 as it is the result of their hard
work
, while some
people
 consider it unfair as it harms the equality of the organization. In my opinion, it is obviously necessary for
directors
 to get paid more than ordinary
workers
. For the
people
 who support
this
,
directors
 spent more time on their
career
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, so they have more experience and knowledge than the other
workers
. So, it is the result of the
directors
' hard
work
 to take the position. ,
Also
directors
 must take more responsibility for the decisions and directions they make. In
this
 point of view, they have to do more than what normal
workers
 do at
work
, so it is necessary for them to receive more salary. For the
people
 who do not support
this
, it is thought that
directors
 break the equality of the organization by receiving more salaries. They look for equal culture and compensation for the organization.
Also
,
,
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usually
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 normal
workers
 spend more time doing actual
work
 and it gets more intense sometimes. For these reasons, they insist
directors
 should receive the same or similar salaries as normal
workers
. From my point of view,
directors
 obviously have to receive a higher salary. From the experiences and know-how
directors
 have, the future of the business could change. It's a huge responsibility for them to bear. So it must be compensated by money.
Also
, if they receive more money, it will become
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motivation for
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 to struggle harder so that they can be great
directors
 sometime in the future.
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, if executive
get
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 paid the same as other ordinary staff and have more responsibilities, it is less likely to take
this
 position for
people
. In conclusion, in
this
 modern society, it is natural for
people
 to receive better compensation according to their position and responsibility. So, even though there are some controversies,
i
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 think it's necessary for
directors
 to get paid better than the other normal
workers
.
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