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Some people argue that capital punishment is good for the country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #punishment #country
In some communities,
the
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execution is one of the measurable ways to judge
crimes
.
Also
 in some countries, governments realize execution as
punishment
tools
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.
In contrast
, other countries have already stopped using
this
punishment
 and their heaviest
punishment
 is the life sentence. In some
part
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, it seems to be appropriate, but there are some factors that cannot
be overlook
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.  I partially agree with
such
 supporters that some
crime
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criminal
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 cases are really threatening and these
gulties
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gullies
 should be punished,
such
 as murder. Still, I am not sure that lawyers and other court judges have
ability
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 to give these punishments fully
accurately
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. Because I have heard or
watch
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 some news which
are
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 controversial,
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like
lik
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like
 people who did not commit
crimes
 becoming
criminal
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criminals
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then
 being innocent, or some decisions made in
trails
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trials
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 calling questions to individuals. Shortly, I want to say that trails’ judgement cannot be certainly true. 
In addition
, if we see it from the ethical aspect, I do not concede absolutely that
death
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 sentence is the most logical way to judge. Even though some
crimes
 are murders, it does not mean that we can send them to death sentences.
Instead
 of capital
punishment
, we can educate these criminals about the seriousness and importance of
crimes
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 they commit, and
providing
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 them to reconsider their faults and apologize to victims' families.  In the end,
the
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execution might be
fine
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a fine
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 choice to punish guilty
crimes
, but we have to count its ethical quantities. Taking one’s
live
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life
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 brings heavy burdens for both criminals and judges.
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